She brought up the eyes during breakfast. It’s always good to ambush a man while he is eating sausage and eggs. She said, we need to talk. You know those eyes all over the house? The ones you installed to watch me?
He told her that he knew the eyes she was referencing. He had pulled a muscle installing them and he was still making payments.
They have to go, she said.
He told her that there was no way. He had to have them watch her. He had to know what she was doing at all times, because he had been cheated on before. Good women are hard to come by, he said. I think you are a good woman, but I cannot be sure.
She said, I’m going to take a knife to them. I’m going to blind them all. I’m going to make them cry.
He told her that she was over reacting.
She reached out and took his plate. When she lifted the plate in the air he told her to stop. When she threw the plate across the kitchen he asked her what the hell was wrong with her. When she walked over to the counter and pulled out a butcher’s knife he was speechless.
Raven Corinn Carluk
March 19, 2011
Quite the enjoyable piece. Disembodied reptile eyes are creepy.
somethingnewplease
March 21, 2011
Embodied reptile eyes scare me too.
laradunning
March 19, 2011
Good for her! Very fitting picture to use. The story was very gripping, drew you in with his unusual thinking.
somethingnewplease
March 21, 2011
Glad you liked it. The eyes were inspirational to the story.
flyingscribbler
March 19, 2011
That showed him! I really like the shift in the balance of power in your story: it has a poetic charm and is very satisfying. Also, I liked your tone and brevity.
somethingnewplease
March 21, 2011
Tone is something I wish I could master. Thank you for the kind words.
sparrowsong
March 19, 2011
Another exploration of the concept of gaze, voyeurism, trust and surveillance. Excellent.
That picture gives me the inexplicable urge to go pet a lizard.
somethingnewplease
March 21, 2011
I have noticed I have these certain kicks and themes that I unconsciously enjoy writing about. Or maybe I’m just boring and keep to the same patterns. Either way, it works for me.
anwa
March 19, 2011
A good woman will never make you, or your disembodied eyes, cry. Ever.
somethingnewplease
March 21, 2011
Well, I like challenging women personally, so I won’t complain one way or another.